Tuesday, September 18, 2007

Some gifts are better than others

Splatter on laundry
Hung to dry in the sun
Damn bird

Rollerskates
Hockey to be played
Goals to score

A gift so precious
Unexpected, unasked for
I love you mommy



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13 comments:

lissa said...

I like these contrasting moments - one almost frustrating then comes something sweet.

Jo said...

This is very good, I love the ending (of course I do). You did great!!!!

gautami said...

That is so beautiful..A child can make frustration disappear wit her unconditional love...

paris parfait said...

Oh, yes! You've captured it - the best gift for any mom is that precious phrase!

tumblewords said...

Great! From one end to the other - a nice take on the prompt. Love it!

keith hillman said...

Those last few words are the greatest gift a parent can get! Loved it.

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Awesome.

I hate to say it, but I've yet to join the Writer's Island. I'm watching it, though.

Gillian @ Indigo Blue said...

You are a haiku wizard!!!!
Great writing missy.
xo
Blue

phyllis said...

what a nice gift to read...

sister AE said...

very nice. you have gifted me with a smile.

Lea said...

and such a gift that last line is, especially when we are caught in the mundane... makes your heart melt...

Ashley Lyn said...

The poem is lovely. You've crafted it so well that we the readers are just as surprised by the last line as you are of the statement. Sweet and simply beautiful.

Rambler said...

oh may not really relate to all the love, but still it strikes me really good.
I am sure you and any mom would love that right.